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PoT: Challenge: Temper

Fic post from my archive.

Temper

Yukimura apologizes to the teams his own injured, and picks up a challenge on the way. Drama, I-3

Seiichi's eyes narrowed. He had come here to render an apology, but he'd be damned before he stood still to be a source of entertainment for Fuji Shuusuke.


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[info]aishuu
2004-06-28 01:14 am UTC (link)
I still love you.

Your Yukimura is the best portrayal I've seen. He's strong enough to hold the team together, yet there's a beauty to him which makes him seem.... gentle.

I love where this arc seems to be heading. I really can't praise this enough.

One question, concrit. Do you use a spellcheck?

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[info]branchandroot
2004-06-28 03:05 am UTC (link)
Thank you! ^_^

I think Yanagi put it best, and I have to write it down sometime very soon; he likened Seiichi to a dragon. The image seems to fit very well.

I do use a spellcheck, though I sometimes wonder about the people who programmed it. *pained* Did the spellcheck gremlins strike again?

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[info]aishuu
2004-06-28 05:05 pm UTC (link)
A couple of typos, not really worth fussing about (I hate it when people nitpick), but they should have been caught be the spellcheck.

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[info]branchandroot
2004-06-28 07:50 pm UTC (link)
Please, feel free to nitpick if the mood takes you! *glares at program* There are days I think someone at Macromedia was asleep at their desk when this particular part of the package was signed off on. It throws the weirdest curve-balls at me every now and then. And my native spelling skills suck harder than a starving ant-eater, so I'm really very grateful when people point out the things I miss so I can go fix them. ^_^;

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[info]aishuu
2004-06-28 07:52 pm UTC (link)
Okay, I will be nitpicky if I see something. Many people are sensitive, and I'm a professional editor, so... ^^;; I get carried away. ^_^ But I still love your writing.

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[info]annotated_em
2004-06-28 02:02 am UTC (link)
If Fuji had implied that Seiichi's team was undisciplined and ill-trained, Seiichi had just come within two breaths of calling Fuji a coward.

[giggles] And the race to see who can cut the deepest whilst being polite is on!

Seriously, though, I like where this is going, for Fuji. (This is a separate arc from the Fuji/Tachibana arc, yes? The way Fuji's caught fire here would seem to indicate a wholly different direction than the direction he's going with Tachibana...)

Squee!

[fangirls for a bit]

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[info]branchandroot
2004-06-28 03:07 am UTC (link)
^_^V

Oh, you're right about that! You're so smart. *nods brightly* Why, yes, it is a different arc. (I hadn't actually been sure, yet...)

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[info]soloproject
2004-06-28 03:13 am UTC (link)
\^o^/

Fuji amd Yukimura head to head! And Tachibana and Yuki *swoon* my favorite buchous. You are so sneaky! *hugs you tight*

And Ryouma is such an adorable snark here, I don't really like him but here I do! But Yukimura still rocks.

his vice-captain, nudging back the other Regulars, clapped a hand over his eyes

Wahaha~! Oishi is SO CUTE. I noticed this right away, for some odd reason. He's my favorite Seigaku because he's so cute and tries so hard. ~____~ Well, and Fooji and Eiji too. XDD

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[info]branchandroot
2004-06-28 03:44 am UTC (link)
*hugsback* Tachibana rocks. Not quite as hard as Yukimura, but darn close.

I was actually quite taken with manga!Oishi; he can be so evil in such a cute and conscientious way.

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[info]annotated_em
2004-06-28 03:40 pm UTC (link)
manga!Oishi; he can be so evil in such a cute and conscientious way

And there you have my entire obsession with the dear boy, in a nutshell. Conscientious evil. Mwahahahahahahah.

[snuggles on Oishi]

Oishi: [sigh]

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[info]lechaco
2004-06-28 04:28 am UTC (link)
your Yukimura is so intense, I'm getting a bit intimidated XD;;; uwah Fuji and Yuki head to head *_* though I would really love to see them get along in the future. they have so much "girlfriend" potential in common! :D;;;

Poor Gen-bunny. he didn't get a kiss from the Good Seiichi :( *weeps for the dork-sama*

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[info]branchandroot
2004-06-28 04:39 am UTC (link)
*happy* I think they probably will get along, provided Fuji isn't in a snippy mood. I'm pretty sure they each think the other is interesting.

*pets Gen-chan* I'm so mean to him. He will get one, though; I just haven't decided quite when yet...

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[info]naanima
2004-06-28 10:36 am UTC (link)
You have no idea how happy I am. I'm practically humming with glee. This is just wonderful. Yukimura, oh Yukimura, silk over steel, and so much more. Manipulative, strong, and a damn wonderful human being. The way the captains know, and acknowledge each other. There's obviously pride and so much respect.

Tachibana's respect and surprise Yukimura's apology in context, is believable. The joy and pride he has for his own team shines through so damn well. Ann's over-protectiveness (hell, the whole team's over-protectiveness) of Tachibana is ADORABLE!

Yukimura and Fuji's interaction is perfect. A study in opposite (yet similarity) if there ever was one. Except well Fuji is cruel, Yukimura is ruthless. No, not exactly right, I'm not saying it right. Fuji is the type that will toy with an opponent, dragging it out before the kill, Yukimura will kill you. the end. Arghh, still nto getting it right *bangs head on table*

Ryouma is so Ryouma that I cry in tears of joy. The confident, the sheer thrill of playing for the sake of playing. I, it's beautiful. And Yukiumra's realisaiton of Renji lecturing him about playing full out *laughs* They know each other so well.

And the polite, yet determined challenge to Tezuka. See, Yukimura SHINE! Yes, see him kick arse.

I really cannot wait for the next part. I LOVE YOU! Truffles? Coffee? Some sort of exotic plant? *offers praise*

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[info]branchandroot
2004-06-29 05:26 pm UTC (link)
*beams* I'm having so much fun with Yukimura. He's a joy to write, and, of course, it gives me an excuse to keep going back to watch the bridge-scene and listen to that voice.

I know what you mean about Fuji and Yukimura. I'm actually trying to lay the difference out in another story right now. Fuji is in it for the fascination. Yukimura is in it for the exhilaration. That's only part of it, but it's a start.

Ah, you know the way to my heart! *loves on truffles and coffee* ^_-

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[info]lady_readwolf
2004-06-29 10:35 am UTC (link)
Oh, sugoi! I can't wait to see what more poors out from this story line!

Of course, I'm fond of An and was thrilled to see her in this, and the entire Seigaku meeting was just fantastic--I could gush for hours, quite literally (while going off on serveral tangents, I'm sure)and still not quite convey how wonderful the interactions of everyone were:

Tezuka and Yukimura
Yukimura and Fuji
Fuji and Tezuka
Oishi, period
Echizen, period
Yukimura & his two boy toys... in bed... (although why they are in bed together could have been explained a little bit better, 'cause, frankly, leaving that sort of deduction up to *my* mind is a rather risque adventure)

and... [sighs] marvelous....

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[info]branchandroot
2004-06-29 05:30 pm UTC (link)
*laughs evilly* Ah, but leaving it up to your imagination was most of the point! This way, you see, I can satisfy (somewhat) both those who wish to imagine our boys boinking and those who merely wish to imagine them... at ease with each other.

Explicitness is in another story. *grins*

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[info]lady_readwolf
2004-06-29 09:58 pm UTC (link)
{tries to imagine the boys just laying at ease with each other... and sees a Kiri-elf-kitten curled up at their feet instead}

hn.


oooh... explicitness can be lots of fun!

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[info]lady_readwolf
2004-07-26 09:33 pm UTC (link)
{panting breathlessly from running about the house in a madly delightful dash of shere joyness}

I didn't mean to re-read this particular fic... honest... I was just... browsing, resetting my memories and... well... I started reading and couldn't stop, and fell in love all over again, and DAMN! Woman! I love you! Marry me, let me bare you children, I don't care! Just write more! Especially with Yukimura, but more, period is good, too...

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[info]branchandroot
2004-07-26 09:58 pm UTC (link)
*giggles* *hugs* Working on it. Two bunnies hybridized, just in time for me to go on a regimen of fairly heavy-duty drugs. So it's kind of slow going. But there will be Yukimura, a bit, and lots of Sanada getting it on with various people. *nods*

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[info]lady_readwolf
2004-07-26 10:32 pm UTC (link)
Hey! You're working on something---drugs or no drugs, that's good enough for me!

Now, however, I've determined to go back and re-read *all* of Challenge, since I've just told my best friend she *HAS* to read it, before going back to re-read your other stuff, too. ^.^;; so...

I'm good for this week. No promises for next week, however.

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[info]solaas
2005-01-27 06:23 pm UTC (link)
...I think I'm going to have nightmares tonight. The Yukimura-Fuji cold war was that scary. o.o;;;

And excellent! It's all just excellent. Fell over laughing when Yukimura came to himself and noticed Inui gathering doubtlessly iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii data. XD

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[info]branchandroot
2005-01-27 07:38 pm UTC (link)
*giggling* I think the team stories where Rikkai and Seigaku mix were the most fun to write, after "Challenge" itself. Bouncing all these characters off each other made for some great snarkiness. Especially Yukimura and Fuji. Poor Fuji; he really comes in for a lot of being baited in this arc. *wicked grin*

Glad you liked it!

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